People often show us press releases they’ve written.
Even if the releases have good information, the info in them usually is in the wrong order.
Good releases are mini-news stories with the most important information coming first.
The first sentence doesn’t have the news or what happened that you want published, i.e., local company wins major award.
The first sentence contains the names of everyone involved. The first sentence should be general: local company, etc.
There are no facts to show why event is important. If the release is about a disease, it should have the number of people with that disease.
The release is not be targeted to a specific reporter, i.e., local media need local statistics, business media need business details.
The release has too much jargon.
Unless you’re targeting a trade journal, you’re working with a generalist, a reporter who is covering many beats these days.
Even if the reporter knows what the jargon means, they need to translate it for their audience.
Why not make their job easier and translate it yourself?
The release doesn’t have any sources or people to call to get the necessary quotes.
Journalists work on crushing deadlines while fielding hundreds of pitches
If they know you’ll be easy to work with by providing everything they need quickly, they’re more likely to choose your story over another.
And, BTW, the company mission statement goes at the end.
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